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“You can’t run that story.”
Katrina Shaw heard more threat than plea in the woman’s voice. It wasn’t the first time her reporting had riled someone, but she wasn’t about to back down now. Besides, it was too late. The story was tomorrow’s lead with her photo of the fatal crash on page one above the fold.
“It’s already on the page,” Katrina said, sensing more than seeing the woman’s slight forward movement on the other side of the waist-high counter.
“That’s my mother, you heartless—“
“I’m truly sorry about your mother.” Katrina’s fingers brushed the underside of the lobby countertop and hovered at the silent alarm button. “I understand your loss, but your mother is not in the picture, just her car.” She softened her voice. “We don’t run photos of victims in a situation like this. I’m sorry, but this is a major story because of that dangerous intersection.”
The woman curled her fingers into fists and her knuckles whitened. Her eyes hardened. “I want to talk to the editor.”
“Just one moment and I’ll see if he’s available.”
Katrina turned her back and then wondered if that was a good idea. On her way out she shot a warning look at the receptionist, and then forced her feet into a reasonable walk through advertising. But she didn’t exhale until she made it to Bob’s corner desk in the newsroom.
“The daughter of the victim in that T-bone on Highway 33 wants to talk to you. She doesn’t want us running the story.”
Bob Henley’s fingers drilled into his keyboard and he spoke without looking up. “Tell her I’ll meet her in the conference room.”
Katrina sat down at her desk and pressed the receptionist’s extension. No need to step directly into the line of fire more than once in a five minute period unless absolutely necessary.
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The BIG Reveal: Last weeks First Page was submitted by author Marlene Banks. Marlene's first published title, Ruth's Redemption will be released Feb 2012 by Moody Publishing's Lift Every Voice imprint.
The last time Marlene shared her first page- she and her editor took your comments into consideration and made some changes. Marlene appreciates your comments on this title and sends her thanks.
Have a Great Fall day ya all,