“That was so cool, I hardly know how to say how rad it was,” Jason said.
“I’m with you. The guy was a hunk. Really.”
“Yeah, and she got my groove on.”
Okay, a bit over the top, but you get my drift. Do your characters talk like YOUR generation instead of theirs?
“We had so much to drink, we were tipsy.”
“Wow! That’s so bad. Check it out, bet he thinks he’s the boss!”
A little further over the top, and yet, I’m getting submissions where the twenty to thirty crowd talk like me forty years ago, and in a couple instances, like my mother. And not just in dialogue, but in their internal dialogue as well.
Younger characters should talk like younger characters today, not like when we were growing up. If you aren’t going to write contemporary in contemporary fiction, then stick to historical. And then make sure you’re in the correct period with expressions as well.
Police aren’t fuzz anymore, most teens don’t talk about getting their kicks, and they definitely don’t wear threads. Not unless you’re writing about the sixties.
Wonderful stories are turned down when dialogue and internal don’t match the period you are writing.
Just grub to mull over. Or food for thought.
That's my take on it!