tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post5972735862507495748..comments2023-11-02T05:29:57.954-04:00Comments on From the Heart: Would You Read On? hosted by Diana L. FlegalAndy Scheer, Hartline Literaryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09010440105558099014noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-27457970330505552632012-07-27T15:46:05.134-04:002012-07-27T15:46:05.134-04:00I really do love the voice and I love the writing....I really do love the voice and I love the writing. I know I would turn the page, but it still feels as if something is missing.I'm going to tentatively agree with that there needs to be some kind of action happening. Maybe your Main Character and his siblings can be packing up something while waiting on Gam?<br /><br />I'm also wondering, what is your main character's name?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-32387353067495901362012-07-26T19:01:04.757-04:002012-07-26T19:01:04.757-04:00I'd definitely keep reading. The author had me...I'd definitely keep reading. The author had me at "My plans changed though when old widow woman McGuire, with her thick rimmed glasses and teeth that bounced when she talked, stuck her nose all up in our business." Love that line. <br /><br />I thought the voice was great. It really drew me in. I also think the character has something he wants--to be responsible and care for his sisters the way his mama would want him to. In some ways it seems like he's already lost out, but I get a sense that this kid is a fighter.<br /><br />There's the added tension that Gam might or might not be a help.<br /><br />I think the parts are all there for a wonderful story with a delightful character.<br /><br />BeckyRebecca LuElla Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06823550402103559922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-39720971049949048862012-07-25T17:38:40.283-04:002012-07-25T17:38:40.283-04:00I would definitely read on. I have always enjoyed...I would definitely read on. I have always enjoyed MG and this one has a good start. There's "someting on the hook". :)<br />Hope you had a wonderful birthday. I like the picture of your little Molly and you.<br /><br /><br />PS I am not a robot!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-82797482089238196032012-07-25T16:59:10.025-04:002012-07-25T16:59:10.025-04:00I do not typically read MG, but my twelve year old...I do not typically read MG, but my twelve year old niece is reading over my shoulder right now and informs me this sounds “kind of cool.” High praise. :-)Kathryn Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16112741861843306231noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-84435985536831409672012-07-25T14:05:37.306-04:002012-07-25T14:05:37.306-04:00I agree w/most of the opins above. I'd read on...I agree w/most of the opins above. I'd read on too, but also wonder about starting w/action. Kids attention span, and all that from today. :)Carolinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08765332646987825952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-7846284735613629162012-07-25T12:35:26.394-04:002012-07-25T12:35:26.394-04:00I would read on for sure. I love this start. There...I would read on for sure. I love this start. There is a character I can love--an orphan who wants to take care of his siblings, and who struggles with forgiving the butinsky who turned him in. There is conflict--Gam is coming and she's not going to be easy to deal with. And there is a voice--the boy describes the old woman as having teeth that bounce when she talks. <br /><br />I suggest the writer read THE MOSTLY TRUE ADVENTURES OF HOMER P. FIGG, and THE CHARLATAN'S BOY to steep him/herself in voice and character, because that would make her character's voice even stronger. <br /><br />I loved this and I'm itching to critique it--there were a couple of minor things I saw. <br /><br />I read a lot of MG books and I think this is a great voice for MG.sally apokedakhttp://www.sally-apokedak.com/whispers_of_dawn/2012/06/win-kindle-fire-sweepstakes/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-43275534473070233882012-07-25T10:58:23.453-04:002012-07-25T10:58:23.453-04:00I would read on, but I recommend moving this secti...I would read on, but I recommend moving this section down and starting with current action rather than a retrospection. Not sure middle graders would latch on to "thoughts."Davalyn Spencerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07790903623368896086noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-23889193768323959952012-07-25T10:41:13.434-04:002012-07-25T10:41:13.434-04:00I love the voice! Yes I do. So I would read on.I love the voice! Yes I do. So I would read on.Story and Logic Media Grouphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13317731231950753140noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-46795112231774083382012-07-25T08:37:31.358-04:002012-07-25T08:37:31.358-04:00Yes, I would read on!Yes, I would read on!Lynn Donovanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03758025695796086125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-30175442919912423532012-07-25T07:48:15.683-04:002012-07-25T07:48:15.683-04:00I like the voice. I don't know if a middle rea...I like the voice. I don't know if a middle reader would enjoy it as much as I do, because it's very atmospheric, and from what I know of kids, they prefer action. Still, as an adult, I'd read on. I want to find out how Gam treats them and what happens next!Normandie Fischerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10598870265371056412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2443765296489868573.post-12315954078375997512012-07-25T06:07:18.108-04:002012-07-25T06:07:18.108-04:00I think I would, but some action needs to take pla...I think I would, but some action needs to take place soon or the author will lose me. The one thing I noticed is that the voice uses a lot of oldisms. It would improve the piece if those were toned down a hair.Timothy Fishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06554064732811895577noreply@blogger.com